"In the Morning, I'll Say Hello" is a yuri comic I wrote. But I can't draw, so I'm posting the scripts here for your enjoyment.
Chapter
73
"Did
You See That Too?"
SCENE 1:
The black panels with the starburst lights
representing Kami-sama and Eriko's mother.
Kami-sama: "Her time is
almost at an end."
Eriko's mother: "And do
you believe their love is mutual and true?"
Kami-sama: "It is not
for me to decide. Whether the girl loves her or not is up to the girl. She will
either fully open her heart to Raguel or she will not."
Eriko's mother: "Are you
really so set on holding her here if the girl does not, if she cannot?"
Kami-sama: "That was our
arrangement."
Eriko's mother: "Yes,
but regardless, you may honor our daughter's wishes."
Kami-sama: "You saw her
tonight, her power is unparalleled. The heavens and earth shake with her wrath.
Can that power truly be replaced?"
Eriko's mother: "Is that
what you fear so hard to replace?"
SCENE 2:
It is near dusk, the sun is not yet over the
horizon but the sky is beginning to lighten with the faintest hints of sunrise.
There is a gasp as Eriko lurches awake, as if she is taking a deep breath for
the first time, desperate for air. We see her now in bed, sprawled, blood
covering her, cuts and bruises everywhere, the scars on her back bleeding
profusely. Her heart is beating wildly.
Eriko (to herself):
"What...what's happening...why is it getting worse?"
She lets an arm fall off the edge of the bed,
the fingers lightly grazing the ground, a trickle of blood running down the
length of her arm from her back.
Eriko: "ARGHHHHH"
She breaths deeply to settle herself.
Eriko (to herself): "I
have to get clean...before he wakes up."
She slowly gets out of bed, painfully, wincing
the whole time and staggers to her bedroom door, falling against the door frame
as she tries to pass through. She breathes, steadies herself. Then she slowly
makes her way down the hall towards the bathroom, but sees the light coming
from a not completely closed bathroom door. Then she hears the sound of someone
retching and coughing and groaning.
Eriko: "Arishima!?"
She swings the door open to see him, a shell of
a person, mostly skin and bones, holding himself up by the toilet while sitting
on the ground. His chin is covered in blood. She rushes to his side.
Eriko: "What's
wrong!"
Heizo:
"Er...i...ko....it...it...hurts..."
Eriko: "What can I do?
Please, what can I do?"
But he starts another coughing fit and blood is
coming up and he's trying to cover his mouth. She holds him while this is
happening. He slowly starts to calm down and control his breathing.
Heizo:
"I'm...sorry...you had...to see this..."
He's out of breath while he talks.
Eriko: "Can you
sit?"
He nods yes. She lets go and comes back with a
wet wash cloth. She takes him in her arms and begins to wash his face.
Heizo: "Thank you."
Eriko: "Can you
walk?"
Heizo: "Maybe not right
now...give me some time."
However, she gently picks him up in her arms.
Eriko (to herself): "He
doesn't weigh anything."
In his room, she is holding him steady (while he's
seated) and pulls up his bloody shirt, revealing a small and sunken chest,
emaciated.
Heizo: "Don't look so
surprised, I wasn't always this good looking."
Eriko (to herself): "How
can you still joke at a time like this?"
She slowly pulls a clean shirt over him. She
then gently lays him down.
Eriko: "We should call
an ambulance."
Heizo: "No, no, I'm
fine."
Eriko: "No you're
not!"
Heizo: "Ha...no, you're
right. But don't call. Please."
Eriko: "Why not?!"
Heizo: "Because there
isn't anything they can do."
Eriko: "How can you know
that?"
Heizo: "I've seen many
doctors. I just want to be here now."
Eriko: "Then I'll stay
with you."
Heizo: "No, that's okay,
I just need to rest."
Eriko: "I can't leave
you."
Heizo: "It's not my time
yet, I'll still be here after you get home from school."
Eriko: "But..."
However, Heizo has closed his eyes and appears
to be sleeping.
Eriko (to herself): "His
chest barely rises anymore...why won't he tell me what is happening? Why
doesn't anyone tell me anything?"
She closes her eyes, then stands up to leave.
As she does so, Heizo opens his eyes and sees the bloody streaks on her back,
through her shirt and the cuts on her arms and legs.
Heizo (to himself):
"Please, just take care of yourself my darling girl."
SCENE 3:
Coming into school. Eriko is walking slowly
behind Yuka, not really focused on anything, circles under her eyes, tired and
worried.
Eriko (to herself): "I
shouldn't have left him alone. What if something happens while I'm gone? What
if he...what if he...?"
Yuka turns to look at her, she stops and Eriko
bumps right into her.
Eriko: "Oh, sorry,
I..."
Yuka tips her head at Eriko questioningly and
knowingly.
Eriko: "I...I just
didn't sleep well last night."
Yuka doesn't buy this, she shows that doubt on
her face.
They get into the classroom. Girls in the
background are talking.
Girl: "...get him for
Valentine's day?"
Girl 2: "You're so
brave!"
Girl 3: "Should I make
him something home made?"
Eriko considers them for a moment. She looks at
Yuka who is in front of her putting her jacket away.
Eriko (to herself):
"Valentine's day...Should I get her something? We are...dating.
Right?"
She blushes as she thinks this. She takes her
coat off gingerly (due to the pain of her newest injuries) and hangs it on the
hooks in the back of the room. She is wincing as she takes it off (note: she
still has her school uniform jacket on under her outdoor coat because it's cold
out - so still winter uniforms). As Eriko takes her coat off there are some
murmurings in the room.
Voice: "What's
that?"
Voice: "Look at her
back."
Voice: "Is she
alright?"
Voice: "Should we say
something?"
Yuka looks around at Eriko's back to see what
appears to be stains coming through her uniform jacket on the back and drips of
blood dripping onto the floor. She goes up to Eriko, reaches out a hand and
delicately touches Eriko's back. Both Eriko and Yuka immediately experience a
searing pain and we go right into a flashback.
[Flashback]
Rieko
(Yuka and Suzu's mom) gets up and staggers over to young (teenage) Suzu with a
devilish look in her eye. Her face is mostly obscured throughout this flashback
so that neither the reader (nor Eriko later) have a clear look at it. Rieko
grabs Suzu by the shoulders and throws her into the wall.
Rieko:
"You bitch!"
Rieko
walks over to the stunned Suzu and begins slapping Suzu over and over again.
Yuka
(very young): “Stop, stop, don’t hurt Suzu, don’t hurt her! Stop hurting her!”
There’s
a brilliant flash of light. Rieko stops what she is doing and turns around
(face still obscured), Suzu is already facing that direction, her head hanging
with bruised face and blood at the corner of her mouth and nose. Yuka also
turns to see.
There,
curled in the corner is something, someone, covered in feathers. The figure
rises, radiant in light, wings spreading out, face obscured by the light that
is radiating from within.
Rieko:
"What are you doing in my house?"
We
don't see angel Eriko's face in this version of the flashback.
Angel
Eriko: "SILENCE! You, who have been entrusted with the most sacred of
duties, motherhood, has forsaken that vow. You have stolen their innocence, but
I shall be the one to restore it."
We
see the flaming sword get drawn; the angel gets into a battle pose. Her face is
still obscured by her radiant light but fire in her eyes shows through as she
readies to fight.
Rieko:
"Wait! What are you going to do?"
Angel
Eriko: "What you have taken from them, I shall take from you a
thousand-fold. Meet your judgment!"
The
angel raises the sword and moves to attack.
Rieko:
"NOOOOOOOO!"
Yuka:
"MOM!"
There
is a slash of the sword but we do not see what it hits in this version of the
flashback. Everything goes to black. The next narration is over the blackness.
Narration: "NO,
what have I done! Please, oh please!"
We then see the twilight sky, then we see the ocean. We pan down more
to see teenage Yuka lying in the sand on the beach with Suzu over her.
Suzu (crying desperately):
“NOOO!!! Don’t leave me!!! Don’t you dare leave me!!!”
Yuka coughs and opens her
eyes. Suzu collapses onto her. We pan to see the legs of angel Eriko on the
rock cliffs above them, looking down. We don't see her whole body, just the
lower part.
Angel Eriko: "How could
you? How could you try to throw your life away? You are all I have. Please,
Kami-sama, I'll do anything, anything!"
The blackness with the
starburst lights representing Kami-sama and also Angel Eriko.
Kami-sama: "Raguel, do
you truly intend to give up your immortality, your power, your duty for that
one girl?"
Angel Eriko (heard but only
seen as a starburst): "Yes, yes, I'll give it all up, whatever you
ask."
Kami-sama: "You have
heard the terms, you know what you must do to complete the pact."
We see a slash, a scream of
pain, a wing falls to the ground in a flurry of feathers and splashing blood,
ultimately landing in a pool of blood.
[Flashback over]
(In the classroom) Eriko immediately lashes out
at the touch from Yuka on her back, Eriko's face is dark and eyes are burning
with anger like we haven't seen from "earth" Eriko since early upon
her arrival. She turns quickly, her arm out, striking Yuka and sending Yuka
flying into a desk. Eriko is blinded by her rage, her pain, and the intensity
of the memories.
Eriko: "ARGHHHHHH DON'T
TOUCH ME!!!!!"
Yuka hits the ground and a desk hard. Her eyes
are closed. Eriko stares wide eyed at what she's just done as well as still
somewhat dissociative. There is a flash in Eriko's mind of all the people that
Eriko has either seen killed or has killed herself mixed with seeing Yuka on
the ground. This should be a rapid-fire of still images of the bloody bodies.
Looking at Yuka hurt, Eriko comes to reality.
Eriko: "No, I
didn't..."
She notices everyone staring at her, with hands
over their mouths, aghast. Hatsue rushes over to Yuka.
Hatsue: "Yuka-chan?!
Yuka-chan?!"
Eriko can only stare but turns quickly and runs
out of the room. Just as Eriko is going through the doorway, Aiko is coming
into the room. She backs up as Eriko comes flying out.
Aiko: "Watch
where..."
Aiko sees Yuka on the ground, but being tended
to by Hatsue. Yuka is coming to, and rubbing her head, weakly.
Hatsue: "Are you okay?
Let's get you to the nurse."
She helps Yuka up and they walk out of the room
past Aiko. Yuka is still out of it and doesn't notice Aiko. Hatsue turns to
Aiko.
Hatsue: "Go after
Eriko-chan...please."
Aiko is bewildered by the whole scene, frozen.
Hatsue walks past with Yuka.
SCENE 4:
Eriko is in the bathroom. She's violently
punching everything in sight, breaking the mirror, cutting her hand, punching
the stall doors, leaving big dents, etc...
Eriko: "God damn
it!"
She picks up the garbage can and is about to
throw it through the window when there is a touch on her shoulder. She turns
with a violent, deathly look in her eyes to see that it's Aiko.
Aiko: "Let's go before
you get caught."
SCENE 5:
Eriko and Aiko are on the roof of the building.
It's cold and windy, Aiko still has on her outdoor coat, Eriko is in her just
her uniform. Eriko's hand is dripping blood.
Aiko: "Here."
She hands Eriko her scarf and wraps it around
Eriko's hand.
Eriko: "Why are you
being so nice to me? Why aren't you threatening me?"
Aiko: "I wonder..."
Eriko slumps down onto the ground. She pulls
her legs up tight against her chest and buries her head in them, her hair
blowing all over.
Eriko: "Is...is she
okay?"
Aiko: "I think so.
Fujimaki-san took her to the nurse."
Eriko "Why didn't
you?"
Aiko: "I...I still don't
know how to face her."
Eriko: "Face her?"
Aiko: "So many things
have happened. We aren't the same as we used to be."
Eriko: "And it's my
fault."
Aiko: "Not
entirely."
Aiko turns and smiles kindly at Eriko.
Eriko: (to herself)
"She's...different."
Aiko (to herself): "Why
is it, ever since coming back, I feel softer towards Arishima? There's
something...comforting...about being around her that wasn't there before."
There is some silence between the two.
Aiko: "I...told her that
I love her."
Eriko's eyes widen at this, then she looks down
and away from Aiko.
Eriko (to herself): "Do
you still love her? Does she love you? I never wanted to come between
you."
Eriko: "Oh...I
see..."
Aiko: "When I confessed,
she told me about you two."
Eriko: "She...she
did?"
Aiko: "I've always loved
her, but...maybe I wasn't in love with her. But you...she's in love with
you."
Eriko: "I...I'm in love
with her too."
Aiko: "I know."
Eriko: "Is...is that why
you left?"
Aiko: "That was part of
it."
Eriko: "But you come
back."
Aiko: "Because I have to
learn to be okay by myself. I think I've depended on her for so long, to fill
up all the voids inside, to give myself a purpose, that there was nothing of me
left."
Eriko: "But she's
okay...thanks to you."
Aiko: "Hmmm, I don't
really know anymore."
Eriko: "Can she love us
both...differently?"
Aiko:
"Maybe....maybe...but, if you can understand that, you're wiser than I
am."
Eriko: "Why are you
telling me all this?"
Aiko: "I'm not sure,
it's just...somehow..."
Aiko (to herself):
"Talking to you, seeing you, something is different...now..."
Aiko: "...nevermind,
what I want doesn't matter anymore. You said you could protect her. But back
there..."
Eriko: "I didn't mean to
hurt her, I swear!"
Aiko: "I know, but you
did."
SCENE 6:
The nurse's office. Yuka has an ice pack on the
back of her head.
Nurse: "Looks like
she'll be fine."
Hatsue: "That's a
relief. Do you feel like you can go back to class?"
Yuka looks out the window and furls her brow.
Hatsue: "I don't know,
maybe Okumura-san found her."
Aiko enters the nurses office at this.
Aiko: "She left for the
day."
Yuka looks down solemnly.
Aiko (to herself): "Come
on Aiko! Just make things normal with her."
Aiko: "Pull yourself
together, we're supposed to work on my campaign after school. It's your fault
I'm in this mess, so you have to do the work. Okay?"
Yuka looks up and there is a kind look coming
from Aiko, like before things got bad between them. Yuka smiles back gently.
SCENE 7:
Heizo in his bedroom, laying down. Mid-day. He
hears the door open and a faint "I'm home" in the distance. As he
lays there, Eriko comes in to check on him.
Heizo: "You're home
early. Is everything okay?"
Eriko: "I was going to
ask you that?"
Heizo: "You don't need
to worry about me. I'm old and that's not going to change, but you only get to
do school once."
Eriko: "I couldn't stop
thinking about this morning. I should have stayed here."
Heizo: "No, your school
and friends are important."
Eriko: "But...you're
important!"
She blushes as she says it. He gently takes her
hand.
Heizo (to himself):
"Please, don't waste your precious time on me."
SCENE 8:
Eriko opens the door to her bedroom. As she
walks in, she notices the mirror from Heizo on her desk (the one that used to
belong to his wife). She sits and looks at herself in it. As she turns it, it
catches the light and there is a burst of reflection from it.
[Flashback]
There’s
a brilliant flash of light. We only see this flashback from the perspective of
Eriko, but never see Eriko as it is her remembering it now (her POV). Rieko
(Yuka's mom - whose face we still don't see clearly) stops from beating teenage
Suzu and turns around, Suzu is already facing that direction, her head hanging
with bruised face and blood at the corner of her mouth and nose. Young Yuka
also turns to see. Yuka's face is wide-eyed in terror.
Angel
Eriko (to herself): "I didn't mean to scare you like that. But I can't
take this anymore. I will protect you!"
Rieko
gets into a defensive posture and yells fiercely.
Rieko:
"What are you doing in my house?"
Angel
Eriko: "SILENCE!"
[Flashback
ends]
We come back to Eriko's reflection in the
mirror.
Eriko
(to herself): " It was like I was there. Is that what really happened? How
could I know those things about her? Did she see it too?"
SCENE 9:
Suzu is asleep in her bed. The bedroom door
creaks open, we sense someone getting into bed with Suzu. Suzu barely stirs,
barely enough to roll over and see Yuka there, curled up next to her. Yuka's
eyes are closed, but there are tear streaks on her face and she's silently
showing the signs of sobbing with her body.
Suzu:
"Shhhh, was it a dream?"
Yuka nods 'yes.'
Suzu:
"Everything will be alright. Here, pull in close."
SCENE 10:
Outside of school in the morning. It's
still gray and cold out. Yuka is squatting down watching a little bird shaking
water off its wings. Yuka has a quick flashback to the baby bird she brought
home to her mother once (Chapter 13).
[Flashback]
Very
young Yuka runs over to her mom and opens up her hands to reveal a hurt baby
bird (alive, and cheeping, but hurt).
Rieko:
“Ah, disgusting, get that away from me!”
Rieko
hits away Yuka’s hand and the bird goes flying into the wall and then hits the
floor with a dull thud.
[Flashback
over]
Eriko walks up behind Yuka.
Eriko:
"How...how is your head?"
Yuka startles at the sound of Eriko's
voice. She has a momentary panic on her face and then composes herself and
weakly smiles up at Eriko and pats the back of her head to show it's okay.
Eriko
(to herself): "Oh god, she just winced. She's afraid of me now."
Eriko:
"I...I'm sorry...I don't know what...I..."
Yuka shakes her head softly back and forth
signaling that Eriko doesn't need to continue.
Eriko
(to herself): "I've really ruined everything, haven't I?"
Eriko:
"Oh, um...okay."
Eriko is looking away uneasily, struggling
to make eye contact with Yuka.
Eriko
(to herself): "I want to ask her if she saw those things yesterday
too."
Eriko:
"I guess I'll go in."
Eriko starts walking in. Yuka tips her head
to the side with wide, wondering, searching eyes, not understanding why Eriko
is walking in without her. She pulls her mouth in and furrows her brow,
stifling a cry, a tear forming in her eye. She gets up and follows Eriko in,
trailing behind her, with her head down. Aiko has seen this in the distance as
she was getting out of her car and was walking in.
Aiko
(to herself): "If their love is real, it shouldn't be so
fragile...sigh...like I should talk."
SCENE 11:
End of the day in the classroom, the
students are packing up. Eriko, without lifting her head off her arms says to
Yuka:
Eriko:
"Are you going home?"
Yuka turns to Aiko.
Aiko:
"We're working on the campaign."
Eriko:
"Oh, okay..."
Eriko tucks her head deeper into her arms.
As she's about to pass by Eriko on her way out, Yuka reaches out as if to touch
Eriko's arm, but pulls back, puts her head down, and follows Aiko out. Hatsue
turns around to face Eriko's desk.
Hatsue:
"Are we going to talk about what happened yesterday?"
Eriko:
"No."
Hatsue:
"I'm sure you didn't do it on purpose. But it was pretty scary. I'm both
of your friends, so I'm worried about her too. But...hang in there!"
Eriko hasn't moved or responded during this
little speech. Hatsue hangs her head, gets up and leaves Eriko alone in the
empty classroom.
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