"In the Morning, I'll Say Hello" is a yuri comic I wrote. I can't draw, so I'm posting the scripts here for your enjoyment.
"In the Morning, I'll Say Hello" by Jaime Lustig
Chapter
76
"Broken"
SCENE 1:
Suzu's apartment. Eriko and Suzu are the only
ones there. Eriko is sitting awkwardly on the couch holding a cup of tea.
Suzu: "I know you're not
one for chit-chat, so let's get to it. What's going on with you two?"
Eriko: "Wha....what do
you mean?"
Suzu: "Neither of you
are acting like yourselves. Did something happen?"
Eriko (to herself): "How
can I tell her that I let her down?"
Eriko: "I...I,
um..."
Suzu is watching as Eriko is extremely uncomfortable.
Suzu
(to herself): "Maybe I shouldn't push."
Suzu: "It's okay if you
don't want to tell me, but, maybe you'll feel better if you do."
Eriko blurts out:
Eriko: "I pushed her
down!"
Suzu brightens up in glee at this
(misunderstanding it, as if Eriko meant that she and Yuka were making out.)
Suzu (to herself): "I
didn't think she'd be so forward. You little vixen!"
Suzu: "You don't have to
be embarrassed by that. I mean, I figured you'd kissed by now, but..."
Eriko starts blushing and waving her hands in
front of her, nearly spilling her tea.
Eriko: "NO NO, not like
that at all! We really haven't..."
Suzu looks worried.
Suzu: "Then what?"
Eriko: "You...you saw me
outside earlier...sometimes...sometimes I can't control myself...I...I hurt her
in class."
Suzu looks heartbroken at this.
Suzu: "Oh, I
see..."
Eriko: "I'm sorry, I'm
so sorry!"
Suzu: "Was it on
purpose?"
Eriko: "No, never, it
was an accident! I would never hurt her on purpose! I...I want to...protect
her...to cherish her."
Suzu: "I'm glad to hear
that, but, you know what she's been through."
Eriko: "I know....I
know...That's why...why I need to go away."
Suzu: "Is that's what's
going on, you're running away from her?"
Eriko: "I don't know
what else to do."
Suzu: "Do you think
that's what she wants?"
Eriko: "She
should...even if I don't mean to...I might hurt her again..."
Suzu: "So it's better to
give up everything good to avoid hurting her again?"
Eriko: "I...I
guess..."
Suzu (softly, and looking
away): "I wonder if that's how mom felt?"
Eriko: "What?"
Suzu: "Sorry. So that's
why you're here?"
Eriko is silent, she's wringing her hands.
Eriko: "I...I met
her."
Suzu: "Who?"
Eriko: "Your mom."
SCENE 2:
Aiko, Yuka and Kiko are in the entryway to
Aiko's house. Kiko is getting her shoes on to leave.
Kiko: "Thank's for
having me over."
Aiko: "Thank you for
your help. Are you sure you don't want to stay for dinner?"
Kiko: "Yeah, I have
plans with my family, sorry. Bye Kiyoura-chan!"
Yuka waves bye. Kiko leaves. Aiko turns to
Yuka.
Aiko: "Are you staying
for dinner?"
Yuka is hemming and hawing shyly.
Aiko (to herself): "How
do I make things normal again?"
Aiko: "I would like you
to stay for dinner."
Yuka looks up with brightness in her eyes.
Aiko: "Maybe...maybe you
could sleep over, too."
Yuka smiles broadly at Aiko. Aiko blushes and
turns away. Yuka grabs her hand and runs up the stairs dragging Aiko behind
her.
SCENE 3:
Eriko is leaving Suzu's apartment.
Suzu: "Thank you, I
guess, for telling me about mom."
Eriko: "I...I wasn't sure
I should."
Suzu: "I don't know
either."
Eriko: "Will you tell
Kiyoura-chan?"
Suzu: "Maybe...probably.
But what about you? It sounded like this was goodbye. Will you say it to her?
Make it clear?"
Eriko: "I...I don't
know..."
Suzu: "Sounds like we
both have a lot to think about."
Eriko looks off to the side, vacant eyes,
staring out into the distance.
Suzu: "Okay then, bye
bye Eriko-chan."
Suzu closes the door, turns and leans on it, then slinks down to the ground,
with her back against the door.
Suzu: "I know you're
thinking the same thing. Why does Yuka always have to be the one that gets
hurt?"
SCENE 4:
Aiko is spreading out a futon on her floor.
Aiko: "Here, you can
borrow these clothes to sleep in, they might be a little loose though."
Yuka smiles and takes them from her. She leaves
to go and change in the bathroom.
Aiko (to herself): "Is
this what I want? To go back like nothing happened? Like I didn't confess to
her, like she doesn't know about all those horrible things I've done."
Yuka comes back in the loose fitting t-shirt
and shorts she borrowed. They're rolled up, she's looking cute, her hair down.
Aiko: "Your hair's
gotten longer."
The lights are out, Aiko is sleeping in her
bed, Yuka on the futon. Yuka is tossing and turning in her sleep. Aiko wakes,
hearing her moving around, silent gasps coming out from Yuka, slight tears
coming from her eyes, her face in pain.
Aiko (to herself): "What
are you dreaming about?"
At one point while tossing, Yuka grabs at her
neck, where her scar is. Aiko silently gets out of her bed, and gets under the
futon cover with Yuka, she starts stroking Yuka's hair and going
"shhhh" in her ear. Yuka turns into her and snuggles in, still
asleep, but calm now. Aiko closes her eyes and smiles.
SCENE 5:
Time passes, the night is getting late, the
moon is high, both girls are asleep in the futon together. Suddenly the door
bell rings. They both stir. Yuka stares up into Aiko's eyes realizing she's by
her side in bed for the first time.
Aiko: "Don't worry, it's
only the doorbell. I'm sure it's just a prank, someone out late."
Yuka nods 'yes' in acknowledgement.
Aiko: "I should get back
to my bed."
Aiko starts to sit up, but Yuka stops her.
Aiko: "You were having
nightmares."
Yuka nods 'yes.'
Aiko: "Do you want me to
stay?"
Before Yuka can answer the doorbell rings again
and again. They hear the door open and some voices down below, someone yelling.
Aiko: "That voice? It
couldn't be..."
Aiko comes down the stairs with Yuka hiding
behind her as they descend.
Aiko: "What's going on
here?"
The housekeeper and other help (butler, driver,
etc...) back away revealing Kishi (from the treatment center) sprawled out on
the floor.
Kishi:
"Aiko-chan!!!!!"
She gets up to rush towards Aiko, but is
stopped by the driver.
Aiko: "Kishi?! It's
okay, let her go."
Butler: "Ojou-sama, you
know her?"
Aiko: "Yes, and she is a
welcome guest in this house."
SCENE 6:
Aiko and Yuka (still in their pajamas) and
Kishi are at the dining room table. Kishi is scarfing down food.
Aiko: "I...I'm happy to
see you, but what are you doing here?"
Kishi: "I just got out
and knew I had to see you. By the way, you haven't introduced us yet."
Aiko: "Excuse me, this
is Yuka Kiyoura. Yuka, this is Kishi Mizukawa. We..."
Kishi: "You're Yuka! Oh
my god, you're so cute. It all makes sense now!"
Yuka turns to look at Aiko with a questioning
face. Aiko blushes.
Aiko: "Nevermind,
anyway, are you okay? You seem...different."
Kishi: "Just excited to
be out in the world again. Ready for a new adventure. Can't keep doing the same
old thing and expecting something new to happen, right? So I figured I'd see
another part of the country for once."
Aiko: "Well, I'm glad
you're here. Do you have someplace to stay tonight?"
Kishi: "Actually, I was
hoping I might..."
Aiko: "Of course. Please
stay. You're always welcome."
Turning to the housekeeper.
Aiko: "Get a room ready
for our guest."
SCENE 7:
Yuka is asleep on the futon on the ground, Aiko
is in her bed. Noises are coming from elsewhere in the house. We change our
vantage point to the living room, where Kishi is rummaging through cabinets and
furniture.
Kishi: "There's got to
be something in this huge house."
Voice from behind: "What
are you doing?"
Kishi, turns around sharply, all guilty
looking.
Kishi: "Aiko-chan!
Sheesh, you scared me. Isn't there anything to drink in this house?"
Aiko: "No."
Kishi: "Oh, I get
it."
Aiko: "Why don't you go
back to bed."
Kishi: "It's okay, I've
still got some left in my bag."
Aiko: "You're drinking
again?"
Kishi: "Whatever, it's
just a little, keeps us going, right?"
Aiko: "I don't drink,
anymore."
Kishi: "Oh, come on. I
know you were only there to keep your dad off your case."
She walks past Aiko, brushing against her, an
intentional (power-play) bump.
Kishi: "Come on, join
me. It's some pretty good stuff."
Aiko looks up to see Yuka at the top of the
stairs, hanging onto the railing, looking down at them.
Aiko (to Kishi): "I
think you should go."
Kishi turns where Aiko was looking and notices
Yuka.
Kishi: "I see. That's
how it is. Can't bear to let your little girlfriend know what you're really
like."
Aiko: "How dare
you?"
Kishi: "Come on, you
cried it all out to me. She doesn't care about you, she's got someone
else."
Aiko: "You need to
leave. Now."
Kishi: "Fine, I'm out of
here."
She goes up the stairs. She stares Yuka down as
she passes. Yuka backs away as Kishi passes.
Kishi: "What a
waste."
A few minutes has has passed. Aiko and Yuka are
now sitting on the bottom step of the grand staircase. Kishi comes down past
them. Aiko gets up.
Aiko: "Let me get you
help."
Kishi: "A minute ago you
were kicking me out."
Aiko: "You picked me up
when I was down. Let me do the same for you."
Kishi: "Too late, I
don't need any fair weather friends. See you around."
Kishi leaves, slamming the door behind her.
Yuka gets up and takes Aiko's hand from behind to comfort her as Aiko stands,
staring at the door. Aiko's hand closes tighter on Yuka's in a gesture of
closeness and sadness.
SCENE 8:
Yuka and Aiko are in the black town car.
Driving down the streets of the main city area, it's late, it's cold, no one is
out.
Aiko (to herself): "I
feel like I've done this before."
Aiko: "I'm sorry for
making you come out with me. You should have stayed and gotten some
sleep."
Yuka shakes her head 'no.'
Aiko: "This isn't the
real her, it's the alcohol talking. I...I want to help her."
Yuka gives her a warm smile and takes her hand
while vigorously shaking her head 'yes.'
Aiko (to herself): "Is
this how you thought about me?"
Aiko: "Do you see her
anywhere?"
They're both looking out the windows, there is
no one out. They pass an alley and see some signs of commotion as they pass.
Aiko "Driver,
stop!"
The two girls get out and walk into the opening
of the alley to see Kishi surrounded by a bunch of guys. One of the guys
punches Kishi hard in the gut, she doubles over. There's a used syringe on the
ground.
Man: "That's just a
taste of what you're going to get for stiffing us."
Man 2: "Yeah, that was
the good stuff too!"
Aiko: "HEY! Get away
from her!"
Man: "Oh ho, who's this?
Friends of yours? They look pretty nice."
Two of the three men start moving towards them.
Kishi: "No, leave them
out of this."
Man 3: "Come here
girlies, we got some nice stuff for you."
Aiko grabs Yuka and they turn.
Aiko: "Quick, back to
the car, we need to get help."
Man 3: "Hey, stop
them!"
Man: "Let them go, we're
almost done here."
As Aiko is pulling Yuka away, Yuka trips.
Aiko: Yuka!"
As Yuka is getting up, she can still see into
the alley. There's a bright flash of light. Then she sees the crouched figure
of Eriko as an angel with her back to Yuka, covered in her as yet still folded
wings. Eriko slowly and majestically rises, her wings spreading.
Man: "What that
f..."
Aiko grabs Yuka and pulls her to her feet, not
seeing what Yuka is looking at as Aiko's view of the alley is blocked by the
corner of the building.
Aiko: "Get up!"
SCENE 9:
Aiko and Yuka are sitting in the waiting room
of a hospital. It's dark and empty, late at night. Yuka is sleeping with her
head in Aiko's lap. Aiko is staring at Yuka's long eye lashes.
Aiko (to herself): "I
don't understand what happened to those men, how Kishi escaped. When the police
came they said...they said the men were..."
Tears are coming to Aiko's eyes. A nurse comes
up to them.
Nurse: "Are you
Mizukawa-san's friends?"
Aiko delicately wipes her eye with a finger.
Aiko: "Yes."
Nurse: "She's asking to
see you."
SCENE 10:
Aiko and Yuka are at Kishi's hospital bedside.
She's got an IV in, some bandages on her face, a black eye, etc...
Aiko: "You look
terrible."
Yuka's eyes get wide in shock, but Kishi gives
a big smile and Aiko and Kishi share a good laugh.
Kishi: "I called my
parents. They've agreed to send me back again."
Aiko: "I thought you
were the one who said not to keep doing the same thing expecting a different
result."
Kishi: "Yeah, I know,
but...it's really the only place that feels like home anymore."
Aiko puts her hand overtop Kishi's.
Kishi: "Besides, when
I'm there, at least I can help other people."
Aiko: "You helped
me."
SCENE 11:
It's morning. Tight shot on Eriko's pained,
sleeping face. She's grimacing, and groaning in pain. Her eyes are closed.
Eriko (to herself): "It hurts...but...it
feels like something is..."
She opens her eyes and turns to see Yuka, with
a washcloth and a pan of water, lifting up the back of Eriko's blood stained
t-shirt and washing the scars on her back. Eriko's eyes go wide.
Eriko: "Stop! Don't do
that!"
Yuka shakes her head 'no' slowly and keeps on
tending to Eriko's back. Eriko sits up and grabs both of Yuka's wrists.
Eriko: "Why are you
here?"
Yuka gives her a small smile and looks her deep
in the eyes. Eriko looks at herself gripping Yuka's wrists and lets go in
shame.
Eriko: "You shouldn't be
here."
Eriko gets up and moves towards the bedroom
door. Yuka reaches out and grabs Eriko's hand.
Eriko: "Don't you
understand? I'm no good for you? I've only ever hurt you. I've hit you and pushed
you, I cost you your best friend, I...I..."
Eriko turns away.
Eriko: "I...I've seen
things...I don't know if they're real..."
Yuka squeezes Eriko's hand, Eriko turns to face
her and Yuka shakes her head 'yes' with wide, almost happy eyes, like they
understand each other.
Eriko: "What do you
mean? You've seen it too?"
Yuka shakes her head 'yes.'
Eriko: "Does that mean
it's real? That I...that I...?"
Yuka tries to open her mouth, but nothing will
come out.
Eriko (to herself): "Is
she trying to talk?"
Yuka opens her mouth again, but still nothing
comes out.
Eriko: "What is it? I
don't understand. I don't know what you're trying to say."
Yuka takes Eriko's hand that she's holding and
gently brings Eriko's fingertips to her (Yuka's) neck, moving them down until
it touches the scar. At this, they get a searing and painful flashback:
[Flashback]
The night
Eriko intervened between Rieko and teenage Suzu.
Angel Eriko:
"NO, what have I done! Please, oh please no."
Child Yuka
(age 5ish) is on the ground, blood on her neck, her mom is yelling.
Rieko:
"What the hell are you? Get out of my house! Get out, get out!"
Teenage Suzu
is kneeling down holding Yuka's head in her lap. Yuka looks up and gives Suzu a
weak smile.
Angel Eriko:
"Why did you get in the way? I was trying to save you!"
Yuka goes to
speak but nothing comes out. She clutches at her neck and grimaces in pain.
Eriko turns to face Rieko.
Angel Eriko:
"You have brought misery to your children and now, look what you have
caused. You will receive no mercy!"
Eriko raises
her flaming sword once more, Rieko is terrified, but Yuka reaches out a hand
and touches Eriko's long dress.
Angel Eriko:
"Yuka."
Yuka shakes
her head 'no' slowly and puts her hands together as if in prayer. She leaves a small
bloody smear on Eriko's white dress where she had been touching it.
Angel Eriko:
"Twice now you have asked me to spare your mother's life. If the child
cannot judge the parent, how can I?"
Eriko turns to
Rieko.
Angel Eriko:
"I, Raguel, angel of vengeance, protector of the innocent, balancer of the
world, seeker of retribution, hereby judge you, Rieko Kiyoura, to a life
without your children. You will leave them and never return. You will be
grateful for every moment you are alive and although you will not remember this
moment, know that it is they who spared your life."
Rieko: "I
know I'm no good for them, but I...I can't leave them."
Angel Eriko:
"You must and you will."
Eriko turns to
the children.
Angel Eriko:
"Before I go, I shall remove all your memories of this evening and when
you wake in the morning, your mother will be gone. Say your final goodbyes to
her."
Yuka reaches
out to comfort Rieko who is sobbing. Yuka then turns to Suzu, but Suzu looks
away.
Angel Eriko:
"Will you not say goodbye to her?"
Suzu: "I
never want to see her again."
Angel Eriko:
"Very well."
There is a
flash of light.
[Flashback
over]
In Eriko's bedroom, Eriko's fingers still
touching Yuka's scar.
Eriko:
"NOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!"
She pushes Yuka away, as she does so, her hand
catches on Yuka's necklace (the one that was a gift from Eriko early in the
series) and as Yuka falls away from the push, the necklace breaks and drops to
the ground.
Eriko: "YOU SEE!?!?! I
did this to you. I don't understand it all, but it was me, I took your voice, I
took your mom, I ruined everything!"
Yuka is trying to crawl towards Eriko. Eriko is
hysterical now.
Eriko: "Get away from
me! You can't be here, you can't be around me, I can't be around you!"
Yuka tries to reach out and touch Eriko, Yuka
is sobbing, desperate to touch her. Eriko knocks her outstretched arm away.
Eriko: "GO! Please, go,
and don't ever come back here. I don't ever want to see you again."
Eriko crumbles on the ground. Yuka one more
time tries to go to her.
Eriko (sobbing):
"Go...please, just go..."
Yuka looks down, tears streaming down her face.
As she wipes them away, her eye catches on the broken necklace on the ground.
She picks it up and leaves the room. Eriko is a sobbing mess on the ground.
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